Even though her career was cut short when she was in her prime and the fifteen recordings she made were disappointing artistically as well as technically, Olive Fremstad (1871-1951) has never been entirely forgotten by opera aficionados.
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huiminzi1124 2016-07-05 11:07:34
A. 正确，详见“句子结构”部分的分析，该选项句子层次感鲜明，连词适用恰当。 B. While in her prime是主谓省略的形式，while前出现的句子主语是her career，还原到该句中为while her career was in her prime，逻辑含义不合理，应该是Olive Fremstad本人两个in her prime。with结构破乱了句子原来第二层的内部平行关系，使得with引导的部分单独出来，成为第一层中修饰主句Olive has never been forgotten的谓语。这样首先使句子意思完全被改变，其次使句子逻辑含义很牵强：随着她的15部作品在艺术和技巧双方面的失败，Olive从来没有被人们完全忘记。而句子原来的意思则是：虽然她的15部作品在艺术和技巧双方面的失败，Olive从来没有被人们完全忘记，显然后者更合适。 C. 过去完成时had been cut short使用不正确，was cut short与was in her prime逻辑上是同一个时间点，时态应该一致;with引起的错误同B D. 如果使用even with开头，则句子应该为even with A and B, Olive has never been forgotten或者even with A, and with B, Olive has never been forgotten，且A/B应该为结构和逻辑含义两个层面上均平行对等的词/词组，这样，才满足句子“层次间关系清晰，层次内平行对称”的要求。D选项中and the 15 recordings部分是个完整独立的句子，因为是个句子，所以无法和前面的even with her career建立平行关系，又无法直接与主句部分建立从句关系，破坏了整个句子的结构。 E. 用词虽然不同，但是错误的原因及分析方法同D。 句子结构：Olive Fremstad has never been forgotten为句子主句，为第一层次;even though引导表转折的从句属于第二层次，这个从句内部包含了并列的两套主谓关系：her career was cut short and the 15 recordings were disappointing。When she was in her prime作为时间状语从句(第三层次)修饰 was cut short，she made作为定语从句(同属第三层次)修饰fifteen recordings. 句子结构(Grammatical Construction), 逻辑表达(Logical Predication), 动词形式(Verb Form) 1) 句子层次感是否清晰，是判断一个句子是否是好句子的重要标准，连词是提示句子层次的最重要的指标。 2) 当出现前后两句话主谓一致的情况下，后一句可以省略主谓。但在出现主谓省略的句子时，一定要注意判断被省略的部分还原到句子中之后，其逻辑含义是否合理 3) 过去完成时表示的是过去的过去，需要有明确的时间提示，表明该动作是在过去的某个时点或者过去的某个动作之前完成的 补充说明:while in her prime的逻辑主语问题，可以参考OG10-1对A选项的解释 此处笔者着力分析的句子层次问题，希望读者可以重点体会。
zheng911 2015-01-06 00:47:29
句子结构：Olive Fremstad has never been forgotten为句子主句，为第一层次;even though引导表转折的从句属于第二层次，这个从句内部包含了并列的两套主谓关系：her career was cut short and the 15 recordings were disappointing。 When she was in her prime作为时间状语从句(第三层次)修饰 was cut short，she made作为定语从句(同属第三层次)修饰fifteen recordings.
CyndiaLee 2015-04-20 07:58:21
① while in her prime——主语省略 ，主语同前文。 ② With A and B， 主语..... 。 AB要平行 and平行， with伴随——注意判断句子逻辑意思
juncylam 2015-10-08 11:18:23
B选项：While in her prime是主谓省略的形式，while前出现的句子主语是her career，还原到该句中为while her career was in her prime，逻辑含义不合理。
