After several years of rapid growth, the healthy care company became one of the largest health care providers in the metropolitan area, while it then proved unable to handle the increase in business, falling months behind in its payment to doctors and hospitals.
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seacychen 2015-03-15 02:30:53
１）it应省略，同一主语发生的两个动作。２）in its payment to 不如in paying to简洁 ３）while语义不对，另外while表示同是并列的概念，和then矛盾 [Ron]In general, even when "while" is used to describe a contrast, it's normally limited to things that happen in the same timeframe. So, I'd agree with this elimination.When "while" is used to indicate a contrast, it should ideally be used to indicate a contrast between two simultaneous things. (If you're contrasting things in different timeframes, there are plenty of other contrast signals that can be used instead.)so maybe we can remember this as a rule: only use "while" in the middle with the words" at the same time", or there must be some Ambiguity.
糯米团子QUQ 2016-11-03 15:28:45
While在表示转折对比时，有两件events同时发生的含义。
spyalien 2014-11-03 11:17:52
When "while" is used to indicate a contrast, it should ideally be used to indicate a contrast between two simultaneous things. (If you're contrasting things in different timeframes, there are plenty of other contrast signals that can be used instead.)
Monicca 2016-11-28 23:21:32
while表示转折有两个东西同时发生的意思，这里和then矛盾 独具一：健康中心成为医保最大的提供者，之后才被证明不能继续上升（又先后顺序）
糯米团子QUQ 2016-10-12 20:01:15
１）it应省略，同一主语发生的两个动作。２）in its payment to 不如in paying to简洁 ３）while语义不对，另外while表示同是并列的概念，和then矛盾 [Ron]In general, even when "while" is used to describe a contrast, it's normally limited to things that happen in the same timeframe. So, I'd agree with this elimination.When "while" is used to indicate a contrast, it should ideally be used to indicate a contrast between two simultaneous things. (If you're contrasting things in different timeframes, there are plenty of other contrast signals that can be used instead.)so maybe we can remember this as a rule: only use "while" in the middle with the words" at the same time", or there must be some Ambiguity.
chuster 2016-06-02 14:42:59
While在表示转折对比时，有两件events同时发生的含义 即便表示转折对比，while也有"at the same time"的含义在里面，与then矛盾，并让句意变成了the health care company expanding and falling是同时发生的，但是实际上应该是先became largest，然后再fell；其次，its payment不如动词paying简洁，名词和东西优先选择动词。
danislj1227126 2016-05-25 07:02:52
不如paying简洁
danislj1227126 2016-05-25 07:02:52
不如paying简洁
toujiejie 2016-04-20 20:21:04
while 有 at the same time 的意思，与 then矛盾，in its payment 没有 in paying 好
blculily 2015-10-22 10:37:01
即便表示转折对比，while也有"at the same time"的含义在里面，与then矛盾，并让句意变成了the health care company expanding and falling是同时发生的，但是实际上应该是先became largest，然后再fell；其次，its payment不如动词paying简洁，名词和东西优先选择动词。
veravane 2015-10-18 15:33:03
while有两件事件同时发生的含义，而句意是先后发生的， its payment 不如paying 简洁，名词与动词优先使用动词
old4gaming 2015-10-04 13:17:05
while 和then在表述时间上不能放在一起，虽然表示对比
