Each year companies in the United States could save as much as $58 billion annually if they prevented employee illness and gain as much as 0 billion through worker performance improved by simply providing offices with cleaner air.
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小萌萌0605 2015-05-08 09:18:04
重复，improved应该置于worker performance 之前，provinding的主语是谁不明确。
ypheroin 2015-12-26 17:27:03
1. each year vs annually 2. if they prevented 与 through worker performance improved 不平行。 3. through worker performance improved 短语重心在 worker performance，应当强调improved，把improved提前（不同意，这个应该不是一个错项） 4. by simply providing offices with clean air，表达不清楚，没有指出provide动作的发出者（依然觉得有点牵强，觉得这不是关键的错误点）
essieliu 2015-10-10 16:23:57
annually和each year意思表达重复; and gain有和if they prevented并列的嫌疑; through worker performance improved…的重心在worker performance,因此不能准确的表达出原句的意思,应该将improved置于worker之前,使重心变为improved worker performance; by simply providing offices with cleaner air意思表达不清,没有表达出providing的施动者是谁
lien770 2016-10-11 23:37:05
each year/annually 重複 by simply providing if they simply provided
zzv 2016-08-14 22:10:35
annually和each year重复
seline_lover 2015-10-31 10:21:08
by simply providing offices with cleaner air意思表达不清,没有表达出providing的施动者是谁
seline_lover 2015-10-31 10:20:44
annually和each year意思表达重复； and gain有和if they prevented并列的嫌疑； through worker performance improved…的重心在worker performance,因此不能准确的表达出原句的意思,应该将improved置于worker之前,使重心变为improved worker performance;
Jessicajy 2015-06-11 13:36:38
each year 与annually语义重复； through worker performance improved，重心变为了 worker performance，和原句所要表达的意思不一致；providing的动作发出者不明确
qiyeran346 2014-10-20 18:08:06
each year....annually...redundant
