In 1981 children in the United States spent an average of slightly less than two and a half hours a week doing household chores, whereas nearly six hours a week were spent in 1997.
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zheng911 2015-01-23 06:36:19
whereas对称虽然灵活，但是也要在前文中找到相应的部分。同时，主动变成被动，six hours a week这些地方都有些问题。此外， "it's not parallel. if you're not going to mention an external word that improves concision and clarity, such as "the figure", then you should keep the 2 parts as grammatically parallel as possible." 这点Ron说的挺对的。是这样，要不你就抽象出来一个that figure，要不你就尽可能语法平行。不然人家还真不知道你想说什么。
panama 2014-05-31 05:38:15
In GMAT test, it is better do not use the passive tone such as were spent
Ines要上700 2016-06-24 17:16:32
1: it's awkward and somewhat unclear. the use of the passive voice ("6 hours were spent") not only is completely unnecessary, but also obscures the point that the children were doing the work (read this again: you could read it as meaning that someone else was doing the work). 2: it's not parallel. if you're not going to mention an external word that improves concision and clarity, such as "the figure", then you should keep the 2 parts as grammatically parallel as possible. a shift from the active voice, with a clear subject (children), to the passive voice, with an ambiguous subject, is definitely not parallelism in action.
Port1a 2016-12-13 11:53:24
云老师：whereas可以 被动不优
huangzhong09635 2016-12-12 22:35:36
whereas 错误
糯米团子QUQ 2016-11-03 15:14:57
here are 2 reasons to disqualify (c): 1: it's awkward and somewhat unclear. the use of the passive voice ("6 hours were spent") not only is completely unnecessary, but also obscures the point that the children were doing the work (read this again: you could read it as meaning that someone else was doing the work). 2: it's not parallel. if you're not going to mention an external word that improves concision and clarity, such as "the figure", then you should keep the 2 parts as grammatically parallel as possible. a shift from the active voice, with a clear subject (children), to the passive voice, with an ambiguous subject, is definitely not parallelism in action.【同时主动同时被动，提升句子性能】
要考满分的晚琳儿 2016-10-23 16:20:28
1、划线中被动动作的发起者不明确，不清楚6小时的工作是被谁做 2、逗号前后一个主动，一个被动，不符合平行原则
queenkat 2016-10-12 21:09:59
From Ron： here are 2 reasons to disqualify (c): 1: it's awkward and somewhat unclear. the use of the passive voice ("6 hours were spent") not only is completely unnecessary, but also obscures the point that the children were doing the work (read this again: you could read it as meaning that someone else was doing the work). 2: it's not parallel. if you're not going to mention an external word that improves concision and clarity, such as "the figure", then you should keep the 2 parts as grammatically parallel as possible. a shift from the active voice, with a clear subject (children), to the passive voice, with an ambiguous subject, is definitely not parallelism in action.
不考到730誓不罢休的小星星 2016-10-06 20:37:55
被动语态不好
cc佬 2016-09-22 23:53:16
前面是主动spent，则根据平行原则，分号后也要是主动spent, were spent是被动 不平行
francescao 2016-09-08 09:53:35
not necessary to use passive
zhangjunya 2016-07-31 21:43:20
C：1:the use of the passive voice ("6 hours were spent") not only is completely unnecessary, but also obscures the point that the children were doing the work (read this again: you could read it as meaning that someone else was doing the work). 2: it's not parallel. if you're not going to mention an external word that improves concision and clarity, such as "the figure", then you should keep the 2 parts as grammatically parallel as possible. a shift from the active voice, with a clear subject (children), to the passive voice, with an ambiguous subject, is definitely not parallelism in action.
zhangjunya 2016-07-31 21:42:29
C：1、the use of the passive voice ("6 hours were spent") not only is completely unnecessary, but also obscures the point that the children were doing the work (read this again: you could read it as meaning that someone else was doing the work). 2: it's not parallel. if you're not going to mention an external word that improves concision and clarity, such as "the figure", then you should keep the 2 parts as grammatically parallel as possible. a shift from the active voice, with a clear subject (children), to the passive voice, with an ambiguous subject, is definitely not parallelism in action.
